Kia Ora, we are learning to write a narrative story
This is my story and we had a image and we made a plan based on that image.
The mysterious snowy stairs
This is my story and we had a image and we made a plan based on that image.
The mysterious snowy stairs
Two people were lucky enough to live in New York also it is winter. Scott is 27 years old and John is 25 years old and they both decided to go and do something today. They both wanted to do something different. Then suddenly one of them was being followed by some one or not but he can feel a cloak over his shoulders he starts to panic to yelling out “help help help !”.
John heard something but when he heard it the second time he hopped back into the car and went to where Scott likes to go running. John went through and couldn’t find Scott, so john went and yell out to Scott but there was no response. Scott stopped running because he thought that he was being followed by someone. So he looked up and around but he could not see anyone. He was still creped out but he just kept running. Then when he stopped to check again he saw this mysterious twisty snowy stairs. He also looked around again but he could still not see anyone but when he went up the mysterious twisty snowy stairs, he felt scared and crispy because he was cold going up the the twisty stairs.
Scott makes it up to the top of the twisty stairs, soon he sees something or someone. So Scott asked that person for his name and he said “ my name is devil MA WAH HA HA HA HA !, I was the one that was following you when you were running.” The devil did his evil laugh again MAW AH HA HA HA !. I was the something that you felt on your shoulders.
Hi Jasmine.
ReplyDeleteI like your story but you should put an ending to it or make a part 2. Another thing that you might want to work on is capitals. Sometimes, when you would write a name, you would forget the capital. Check out my blog at http://paroagreysineadf.blogspot.co.nz/.
This is a great story Jasmine I like how it is like a horror story with a bad guy (Or evil object). Sometimes I wonder if I could make a story like this sometime. To make it BTB (Better Than Before) you could make it longer, make a second story to add onto this one or maybe add a little bit more detail about the characters eg his hair was long and he wore a blue top.
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading my comment and make sure to check out my blog at http://paroagreynatashal.blogspot.co.nz/